Adaptation B - Script Third Draft

Adaptation B - Script Second Draft

After talking to Alan about the first draft of the script, I have worked on some of the details of each shot. As there isn't much time for each line I wanted to achieve a simple rhythm for each shot so that it is easily readable and not too complex.

Adaptation B - Script First Draft

Adaptation A - Script V2

In this version of the script I have refined some of my steps and worked out the transitions between each step in preparation for making the storyboard. 

Adaptation A – ’10 Steps to Becoming Less of a Burden on Society’

Script 2.0

Title Page:

10 Steps to Becoming Less of a Burden on Society

Note: Title is drawn onto the screen, in a rough way but still easily readable.

Transition - Title moves off-screen or fades.

Screen zooms out to reveal a TV set on standby.

Step 1:

Turn off the standby light on your television.

You are wasting over £80 a year leaving all of your appliances on standby. The average television still uses 10% of its energy when on standby.

Transition - Standby light turns off, screen goes dark.

Multiple plastic bags drop from the top and pile up at the bottom.

Step 2:

Stop using plastic bags.

They are not biodegradable and they end up in places that cause damage to the environment and its wildlife.

Transition - Reusable bag moves off screen to the left.

Empty dinner plate moves onto the screen from opposite direction.

Step 3:

Eat less meat.

You will be significantly improving your own health by eating more greens than meats. It will also make you a healthier, happier worker.

Transition - Hand comes in from left and grabs full plate, pulls it off screen.

Pipe(s) come onto the screen and an on/off switch, then water begins to pour down from the top to bottom of the screen.

Step 4:

Take shorter showers.

If you shower every day, you could save around 3650 gallons a year by reducing your time in the shower by 4 minutes. That’s a lot of water.

Transition - Hand comes in from left and turns the shower off, then the pipe(s) exit the screen as they entered.

 An envelope with ‘overdue’ stamped on the front enters the screen from the top. It opens and a letter comes out, the envelope drops and the letter is centred.

Step 5:

Don’t take out loans you know you can’t pay back.

They will build up and you will have wasted precious time and money.

Transition - Many envelopes drop from the top, obscuring the letter on screen and clearing the screen.

A desk is revealed behind the letters, an ‘employee’ drops from the top to behind the desk and is giving a ‘thumbs up’.

Step 6:

Be Happy.

Be content with where you are in society, your job is important in sustaining a healthy community.

Transition - Government building (parliament) falls and lands on the employee (shadow forms under employee building up to this).

Same figure rises and pushes (supports) the government building with hands above head.

Step 7:

Support your Government.

Your government works hard to keep you happy and healthy, be sure to support them whenever and wherever you can.

Transition - Figure stays still, building moves up and out of view quickly.

Two baskets/bags drop down and the figure catches them (arms still above head), then products rain from the top and fall into the baskets/bags.

Step 8:

Consume.

Buy regularly from your local businesses and enjoy their premium products.

Transition - Figure and the baskets move downward off of the screen.

Next an image of a figure painting onto an easel rises up from the bottom of the screen to the same position. Partway through step 9 the easel gets knocked off-screen by a blackboard, showing the figure writing an equation or doing a lecture (shown as a better job). Note: Perhaps change the figure slightly at the transition between easel and blackboard, he is slouched and brooding when painting but when it changes, he is slightly straighter/more positive.

Step 9:

Contribute to the system.

Instead of doing something ‘creative’ like studying art, you could apply to get a real paying job.

Transition - Figure turns around from the blackboard, notes on blackboard become the 10 steps and the title of the infographic.

Step 10:

Be a model citizen. Show your friends and family all you have learned here and teach them the correct way to behave and fit in.

End screen - Zooms into blackboard on screen, notes on blackboard become the credits (or the credits roll after the screen is completely black).

Adaptation A - Script V1

Below is my initial script, I forgot to upload this earlier. I am currently working on the slide transitions for this script and the storyboard.

Adaptation A – ’10 Steps to Becoming Less of a Burden on Society’

Script 1.0

Title Page:

10 Steps to Becoming Less of a Burden on Society

Step 1

Turn off the standby light on your television.

You are wasting over £80 a year leaving all of your appliances on standby. The average television still uses 10% of its energy when on standby.

Step 2

Stop using plastic bags.

They are not biodegradable and they end up in places that cause damage to the environment and its wildlife.

Step 3

Eat less meat.

You will be significantly improving your own health by eating more greens than meats. It will also make you a healthier, happier worker.

Step 4

Take shorter showers.

If you shower every day, you could save around 3650 gallons a year by reducing your time in the shower by 4 minutes. That’s a lot of water.

Step 5

Don’t take out loans you know you can’t pay back. (MAY NEED MORE WORK)

Step 6

Be Happy.

Be content with where you are in society, your job is important in sustaining a healthy community.

Step 7

Support your Government.

Your government works hard to keep you happy and healthy, be sure to support them whenever and wherever you can. (COULD TWEAK WORDING SLIGHTLY)

Step 8

Consume.

Buy regularly from your local businesses and enjoy their premium products (MAY NEED MORE WORK)

Step 9

Don’t Waste Your Time.

Instead of doing something ‘creative’ like studying art, you could apply to get a real paying job.

Step 10

Be a model citizen. (MAY NEED MORE WORK)

Other ideas

Narrator running out of ideas towards the end, becomes more rushed?

Narrative - 'Ravine' Script Version 2

‘Ravine’ Script

Version 1

Fade in

Shot 1

Title ‘Ravine’ shown in centre of screen, in between two hills of sea plants.

Cut to

Shot 2

Fish 1 swims diagonally across camera view.

Cut to

Shot 3

Scene of sea plants swaying with the current.

Cut to

Shot 4

Fish 1 swims up across camera view.

Cut to

Shot 5

Fish 2 swims calmly across sea bed scene.

Cut to

Shot 6

Fish 2’s tail swims past plants, the plants noticeably sway in the direction of the tail as it moves, as if they are attracted to it.

Cut to

Shot 7

Group of plants stretch upwards as if in pursuit of something.

Cut to

Shot 8

Fish 1 swims in a panic, closely followed by plants from previous shot.

Cut to

Shot 9

Close-up of Fish 1’s face. Fish 1 noticeably bobs in shot.

Fade to

Shot 10

Extreme close-up of Fish 1’s face. Camera slowly zooms in during shot.

Cut to

Shot 11

Much larger mass of plants cover the camera. Camera pans left to reveal Fish 2 being chased by the plants.

Fade to

Shot 12

Fish 2 moves from open seabed into dense coral field. Still pursued by plants.

Cut to

Shot 13

Fish 2 swims frantically through coral to escape plants.

Fade to

Shot 14

Fish 2 swimming upwards, plants begin to close in and surround from below.

Cut to

Shot 15

Fish 1 is trapped by plants and is slowly covered as more and more plants close in. Camera noticeably shifts during shot.

Cut to

Shot 16

Fish 2 swims across from left, still pursued closely by plants. Fish 2 is almost trapped by plants but breaks free and gets away.

Cut to

Shot 17

Extreme close-up of Fish 1’s eye surrounded by plants. Camera slowly zooms in during shot.

Cut to

Shot 18

Far shot revealing Fish 2 on the left and Fish 1 on the right almost completely encompassed by plants. Both fish look at each other. A ravine is shown between them.

Cut to

Shot 19

Close-up of Fish 2’s face. Camera remains stationary as Fish 2 swims to the right and out of view. Fish 2’s tail disappears off screen.

Fade out

Narrative - 'Ravine' Script Version 1

‘Ravine’ Script

Version 1

Fade in

Shot 1

Title ‘Ravine’ shown in centre of screen, in between two hills of sea plants.

Cut to

Shot 2

Fish 1 swims diagonally across camera view.

Cut to

Shot 3

Scene of sea plants swaying with the current.

Cut to

Shot 4

Fish 1 swims up across camera view.

Cut to

Shot 5

Fish 2 swims calmly across sea bed scene.

Cut to

Shot 6

Group of plants stretch upwards as if in pursuit of something.

Cut to

Shot 7

Fish 1 swims in a panic, closely followed by plants from previous shot.

Cut to

Shot 8

Close-up of Fish 1’s face. Fish 1 noticeably bobs in shot.

Fade to

Shot 9

Extreme close-up of Fish 1’s face. Camera slowly zooms in during shot.

Cut to

Shot 10

Much larger mass of plants cover the camera. Camera pans left to reveal Fish 2 being chased by the plants.

Fade to

Shot 11

Fish 2 moves from open seabed into dense coral field. Still pursued by plants.

Cut to

Shot 12

Fish 2 swims frantically through coral to escape plants.

Fade to

Shot 13

Fish 2 swimming upwards, plants begin to close in and surround from below.

Cut to

Shot 14

Fish 1 is trapped by plants and is slowly covered as more and more plants close in. Camera noticeably shifts during shot.

Cut to

Shot 15

Fish 2 swims across from left, still pursued closely by plants. Fish 2 is almost trapped by plants but breaks free and gets away.

Cut to

Shot 16

Extreme close-up of Fish 1’s eye surrounded by plants. Camera slowly zooms in during shot.

Cut to

Shot 17

Far shot revealing Fish 2 on the left and Fish 1 on the right almost completely encompassed by plants. Both fish look at each other. A ravine is shown between them.

Cut to

Shot 18

Close-up of Fish 2’s face. Camera remains stationary as Fish 2 swims to the right and out of view. Fish 2’s tail disappears off screen.

Fade out

FSTS - First Draft of Script