I really like this, Jack - I like the 'unshowy-ness' of it - the sense of the sound collector's boredom almost as he collects the various sounds. I think it's got real power - BUT - I think you're now taking things too slowly - the gaps between the various spoken lines are too drawn out now and it's beginning to dismantle the sense of it being a poem. I like the way you've opened things out and I think there should be a sense of tension that comes from waiting, but I think you need another version - if this is factor 10, and your original was factor 1, then I think you need somewhere in the region of 'factor 6' or thereabouts.
I see what you mean Phil, I'm also glad the sense of the sound collectors boredom comes through clearly. I'll make sure to get a new 'factor 6' version up soon.